I've been taking this responsiblity for almost two years.
Supporting the hotline also provide the efficient,accurate and professional wayof solving
some HR, Finance,Reports and other problems.
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呃，有点奇怪。。而且efficient,accurate and professional 这三个词语很有重复性 回复 20# LovelyAngel
没吃饱 太久没看过英语了，很多语法都忘了。。。 Please find my self-assessment as below:
Review of the year, I learned more knowledge and skills,and the most important part is to learn the responsible and careful working attitude. Moreover, It let me in good chance work here and perform different roles.
The highlighted job role such as:
1. Resource Planing; it is the new challenge for me. There is no doubt that i have to pay more attention and spendmore effort to take care of the new task.
2.Committee of Birthday Party;
3. Administration of MPF CCC;I am on the role almost 2years for support hotline,providing the efficient,accurate,professional ways to help them solve some problem of HR, Finance,Reports.
In the coming year,I hope I can take opportunity to join some trainings for self-upgraded. Eg : Excel skill, management course and so on .I'll work harder to make contribution to our company. 完全帮不上忙… 其实我建议楼主用短句，无必要为左咩技巧而用长句，反而会暴露出你既语法缺陷。 其实我建议楼主用短句，无必要为左咩技巧而用长句，反而会暴露出你既语法缺陷。 本帖最后由 睡着的水 于 2010-1-9 13:55 编辑
it's the new challenge to me
第一次提到的,LZ你为什么要用定冠词the呢
还有
表示“我”的字母“I”永远大写 " and the most important part is to learn the responsible and careful working attitude"
...冇人咁讲嘎嘛... 非常标准的中国式英语。 反正读起来不顺,但我根本不明白是什么意思,更不要说知道存在什么问题了 反正读起来不顺,但我根本不明白是什么意思,更不要说知道存在什么问题了 ...
jean1 发表于 2010-1-9 14:32 https://www.gdutbbs.com/images/common/back.gif 楼主工作绩效很空洞，都不知道做了些什么 读起身吾顺 看不懂 可怜的angel被人抨击 进来学习学习 LZ很强大的中国式英语。。。。。。。。正如别人所愿，用短语吧。反正都做了那么久，水平无所谓了。。
只要清楚表达自己，无所谓追求句式/技巧。。。 learn the responsible and careful working attitude.
你的意思是表达学习到了工作要有责任心，还有谨慎的工作态度。但你的英文表达错了。
the most important thing is in the face of my own work,I must have a strong sense of duty and a careful working attitude.
It let me in good chance work here and perform different roles.
浓厚的中国式英语,意思是不是它给了我一个机会让我可以在这里工作，扮演不同的角色？
it give me a chance to work here and play my own role.
it is the new challenge for me.
小问题，该用a。
There is no doubt that i have to pay more attention and spendmore effort to take care of the new task.
该用it is no doubt that，感觉较好。
give more effort 是不是更好？
take care of？？这里跟attention重叠了吧。
整句应该是，
it is no doubt that I have to pay more attention andgive more effort to achieve the work perfectly.
I am on the role almost 2years for support hotline
这句的意思是，我已经在支援热线差不多两年了。
应该是用现在完成时吧。
I have been one of the Support Hotline workers almost 2 years
providing the efficient,accurate,professional ways to help them solve some problem of HR, Finance,Reports.
提供精确有效以及专业的办法去帮助他们解决HR，财政，报告的问题。
那3个形容词，可以只要1个，直接用专业的，help改为assiat较好。problem该为复数，reports该为单数。
In the coming year,I hope I can take opportunity to join some trainings for self-upgraded. Eg : Excel skill, management course and so on .I'll work harder to make contribution to our company.
I hope I can take opportunity to join some trainings for self-upgraded。
take改为get为好，机会之前该有a，join是不是用take更好？
Excel skill, management course and so on .
感觉是不是用复数？？
这里语序该换过来，先表达自己会努力为公司做出贡献，然后再就感觉自己的不足，如果需要做出更大的贡献，可以学习更多的知识之类较为好。这样不会让公司感觉你贪心，反而感觉你够上进。
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