any advice is welcome here
below is a passage i wrote recently about the olympic games. any comment is welcome here.on sports
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on sports
Never before have I found myself so passionate for sports, and it is probably beacause of the on-going Olympic Games. To be honest, it is the first time i have ever been so close to the games, and i am surprisingly fascinated by the atmosphere. After watching several games, it suddenly occurs to me that there is something in sports that just like the process of the dream-pursuiting. When you stand on the stage, you spare no effor to compete with others under tremendous pressures which others could hardly imaginge to win the gold medal. And unfortunately, there is no certainty for it, after all, there are so many unpreditable factors involved. It is widely accepted that no pains, no gains, while it doesn't mean that when you put into something, you can get something out of it. So every time i see the participants cry the tears of joy when they finally realise their dreams, tears well my eyes unconsiously. They deserve all the flowers and glory after years of hardship. And every time i see the contestants leave the stage with enormous unwillingness, cring the tears of failure, i find myself overwhelmed by the sadness. After what they have been through, the result is cruel. However, that is exactly the beauty and essence of sports, which makes it so facsinating.
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.... I didn't find any mistake~ that's cool~ I mean, grammar~ lolya from the foriegn language department?
回复 板凳 猫爪爪龙天使 的帖子
thank you for your comment, andyour praise truely means an aweful lot to me.actually i am not from the foreign language department, but the automation department Never before have I found myself so passionate for sports, and it is probably beacause of the on-going Olympic Games. To be honest, it is the first time i have ever been so close to the games, and i am surprisingly fascinated by the atmosphere. After watching several games, it suddenly occurs to me that there is something in sports that ( is )just like the process of the dream-pursuiting. When you stand on the stage, you spare no effor to compete with others under tremendous pressures which others could hardly imaginge to win the gold medal. (you will spare no efforts....) And unfortunately, there is no certainty for it, after all, there are so many unpreditable factors involved. It is widely accepted that no pains, no gains, while it doesn't mean that when you put into something, you can get something out of it. So every time i see the participants cry ( crying ) the tears of joy when they finally realise their dreams, tears well my eyes unconsiously. They deserve all the flowers and glory (glories)after years of hardship. And every time i see the contestants leave (leaving)the stage with enormous unwillingness, cring the tears of failure, i find myself overwhelmed by the sadness. After what they have been through, the result is cruel (What is the poin of this sentence? It is what they have been through leading to the cruel result? Does it sound logical? ). However, that is exactly the beauty and essence of sports, which makes it so facsinating.
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回复 5楼 nivek 的帖子
i don' t think you fully understand what i am trying to convey, by the way, all the mistake you point out don'tcount thatmuch , but thanks all the same. besides, i think it is really a necessity for you to look up the dictionary and reconsider
the use of the word "see", and the sentence" what sb has been through".
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